As we drove into my grandma’s drive way and stepped out of the car I thought to myself, you gotta love the Arizona sun; whenever you are touched by its golden rays, you feel the stress run from your body and you are in a sense of peace where nothing bad can happen. And that was just the case for the rest of my vacation as the sun shined down on us every day. It made spring break that much better, as I swam in the crisp blue water of the pool, and walked down the lush green fairways of the golf course with the sun warming the state.
I Liked this a lot you had great detail from your very good word choice, as well your voice was really there I liked it a lot. Although at the end maybe try to go back to your main topic of it relieving stress instead of filling the state with sun. Otherwise it was phenominal!
ReplyDeleteAgain, you have completely conveyed the warmth and peace of Arizona through strong word choice.
ReplyDeleteJohn- your word choice is amazing. This is a nice sequel to your other paragraph! Nice Job!
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